Feedback for Initial Idea

I presented my 3 initial ideas towards the class today. The music for the videos where Happy Home (Lukas Graham), Good Enough (Jussie Smollett) and Let it go (James Bay). All these songs carry a depression/sad theme throughout the ideas as the first two songs are about a loss of a father and a disappointed father while the last one is about the lost of his girlfriend.

Throughout the feedback the main comment I focused most on was on making my ideas more bizarre, as I may have been focusing more on the shots and cinematography than focuses the story line. For example the for the song Let it Go by James Bay instead of just making the music video just about the lost of his girlfriend, it should be he is trying to follow his girlfriend (in a ghostly figure) which leads him to her grave (audience only find out at the end).

     

Main Feedback comments

0: 56 - 1.05 -  A lot of use of fade away. So do not be overly repetitive of technical area.

1:25 - 1:56 - Find other alternatives of the fade away technique i.e. Use one shot where the camera pans way from subject then when it turns back to the subject it is gone, therefore this will only require the actor to move before the camera pans back.

2:23 - 3:27 - Make the relationship (music video) situation more surreal s they are less cliche/strange.

4:32 to 4:45 - effect of where the son looks in the mirror and see’s someone else.

4:51 - 5:19 - Can shift the focus. So instead on focusing on the son, we focus on the father who has passed away. So he is in the shot but no one realises he is there because at the end it reveals he is dead.